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euro_scene · 28 Jan 2010 at 12:32

im only applying for a part time job at a holiday park

Tomorrow they are having a recruitment day.

300 jobs going

and I recon about 600 people my age range (15-19) will apply

So I thought I would make a C.V to stand out.

Thanks

Stupot_ · 28 Jan 2010 at 12:40

Layout looks alright, will probably appeal to the role you're applying for.

I wouldn't give reasons for leaving employment. Just expand on your achievements and the benefits from those particular jobs (teamwork, interacting with people blablabla).

Maybe for grades put down 6 grade A-C GCSE's cos they're not great... then go on to A levels (and spell community correctly

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Expand interests a bit, how do you, as a person, benefit from photography and football? leave out the socialising/music festivals/cars unless you can do anything productive with them, i.e. music festivals - can this be mixed with photography? You enjoy visiting festivals and building up a portfolio of related photography blabla, cars - do you work on cars? technically minded? mechanic? socialising - part of any youth theatre groups? etc etc

Lethal` · 28 Jan 2010 at 12:48

Socialising with friends - everyone knows what that translates to, don't bother putting it

britboy4321 · 28 Jan 2010 at 12:50

Get rid of reasons for leaving. It just sits wrong on a CV.

Your CV has March 2008 - Present in a job. That has a 'reason for leaving'!!! That has another job running concurrently with it! I'm confused are you still at the after-school club or not?! If not -- do you presently have a (part time) job or not?

Also half the time you say dates to the nearest year -- the rest of the time you go to the nearest month. Choose one or t'other and stick with it!

'Socialising' spelt wrong I think.

'Community' spelt wrong in community college. Spell check the lot basically.

Got an email addy?

If you've got a driving license or motorbike license say so. If it's clean, say so.

Some of your sentences finish with a full stop, some don't. Choose either way and stick with it.

'Socialising with my friends', as someone else said, is a 'non-sentence' and may as well go. As in, it doesn't add anything to the CV. Its like saying 'I have a hair cut'!!!

A lot of my comments may be over the top -- but better too good than not good enough!

I love how simple your CV is. I'm not being sarcastic -- it's actually a really nice breath of fresh air -- I could see no waffle at all .. so great on that front .. altogether not bad at all really ..

scorchisio · 28 Jan 2010 at 12:50

lol@socialising with friends, i am quite sure this applies to 100% of the worlds population so why bother putting it

Lysander · 28 Jan 2010 at 12:56

scorchisio said:
lol@socialising with friends, i am quite sure this applies to 100% of the worlds population so why bother putting it

It doesn't apply to me.

J.B · 28 Jan 2010 at 13:00

There's a few stray couple letters in there.

LizardKing · 28 Jan 2010 at 13:01

Is this for Devon Cliffs by any chance?

They love team work so emphasise as much as possible how much you like team sports or how much of a team player you are

No need to put reason for leaving

decmatt · 28 Jan 2010 at 13:03

You spelt socialising wrong, and put commas after apostrophes.

You put March 08 - Present, with a reason for leaving. According to your CV you haven't left. To be honest, I wouldn't put reason for leaving in there full stop.

Get rid of DoB and Marriage Status.

Hve a look at other peoples CVs on here, for some reason the layout seems way to in my face, and feel like an effort to read.

Get rid of CV in title, its obvious its a CV.

No Email or Mobile Number?

JoeFX · 28 Jan 2010 at 13:13

Jesus, don't give that CV to anyone!!

You need to pad it out, rather than using big fonts to fill the page.

Plus...

I wouldn't put 'Curriculum Vitae' in a massive font at the top, you don't need to put it at all... they know what it is.
List your employment history starting with most recent at the top, then work backwards.
Expand on the details of each job, expand on what you did and exaggerate it a bit, i.e. bullsh*t if you have to, use buzz words, and highlight anything that's relative to the job/area that you're applying for. As it stands, your 'reason for leaving' is as longer than the 'what you did'... plus as mentioned above, you don't really need to say why you left anyway.
You shouldn't have "March 2008 - Present" and then state a 'reason for leaving'... i.e. if you've left then it's not "March 2008 to Present" (saying 'present' means that you still work there).
Should really have an introductory/opening paragraph at the top which explains about you, what you are currently doing and what you are looking for... and as it's only a PT job you're after, put what you want to do long-term.
Lots of typos, i.e. no space after commas, no full-stops, capital "I" in "it" in the middle of sentence etc
Put the name and contact number for a reference, i.e. head-teacher from that school.
Spell-check ffs, "Soicalising" and "Coummunity" aren't a great advert for your college!
Your interests just make you sound like a chav tbh!

Apart from that it's fine.

... but good-luck for tomorrow.

euro_scene · 28 Jan 2010 at 13:21

Thanks for the replys guys

yes, im still at the after school club

It is for Devon Cliffs

n111ck · 28 Jan 2010 at 13:27

Ditch the naff blue bits.

britboy4321 · 28 Jan 2010 at 13:29

I liked the blue bits personally!

LizardKing · 28 Jan 2010 at 13:37

euro_scene said:
Thanks for the replys guys

yes, im still at the after school club

It is for Devon Cliffs

Good luck

Worked there for 5 years myself (Glutton for punishment), 5yrs ago, still got some good friends who work for Haven but have all since moved to other parks or Hemel, otherwise i'd put a good word in for you, some of the best years of my life were spent there, work is bloody hard but boy did we know how to party and have a good laugh.

They prefer team payers over experience so make sure you emphasise that on your cv and interview and you will do well.

n111ck · 28 Jan 2010 at 15:21

britboy4321 said:
I liked the blue bits personally!

It looks like a page from a childs school book!!

Explicit · 28 Jan 2010 at 15:29

De ja vu...

http://www.blog.spoongraphics.co.uk/tutorials/create-a-grid-based-resume-layout-in-indesign

Personally, I think the layout/design is terrible, but that's a personal choice.

GingerNinja1989 · 28 Jan 2010 at 15:40

Perhaps tweak that layout/design a bit?

Sod's law dicates that someone else will also submit a CV using that template!

britboy4321 · 28 Jan 2010 at 15:41

n111ck said:
It looks like a page from a childs school book!!

Yea but put it in perspective, its only a part time (probably minimum wage) holiday job thingy.

They presumably want 'lively, energetic, fun' people to be around. A boring old 'all black ink, Times New Roman 12' throughout may actually work against him for this particular role ..

MajorMaccas · 28 Jan 2010 at 15:41

It's memorable, which is what I think the OP was going for. I would remove marital status, think of the age range (15-19). :rolleyes:

Spell check is your friend. I concur with removing the reasons for leaving. Any referees? I would give an outline (bullet points) of your general job role in place of the leaving reasons. If you need more space, remove the address and add the line "referees available on request" at the end. Remove CV from the title.

That's all I can think of for now.

Ricochet J · 28 Jan 2010 at 15:48

What skills did you learn from your work experience?
What did you work experience involve?
Where have you taken a position of responsibility?

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