Your advert comes across as very antagonistic, and discloses things that need not be mentioned.
You're probably right, wasn't something I enjoyed doing. I'm no salesman, its been pointed out to me a few times in my life.
Don't include this, it will only put people off and won't be noticeable if it was done properly:
Just trying to be honest. My dad paid 500 notes to have the paint sorted, and when I saw it this weekend - I wasn't that impressed. But he thinks he's done me a favour. And he thinks its a selling point. So I said I'd mention it.
Or this, if someone wants it, let them have it. You don't need to tell them what it can and can't be used for in your opinion. What does it matter to you if it is bought for commuting, by a young driver, for doing the school run, or for a 70 year old? It is none of your concern whatsoever!
This bit really got your goat didn't it!
You're right, I didn't need to include any of it. Equally I don't fancy fielding questions from 17 year olds who haven't worked out they'd have to sell kidneys to insure it. It's bad enough all the one-off questions of "Wots yur bestest price for csh?". It's an auction. Bid what you like, take it away if you win. Lower it, put spinners on it and tint the windows for all I care. (I would care, but not enough to stop a sale).
Or this, its only minor but its a detail which doesn't need to be there. Tell them the spare display comes with the car, and no more. They might assume it will be a 5 minute job:
Its not a 5 minute job though. Its an hours work, take the instrument cluster out, dismantle it, replace the matrix, reassemble, refit the cluster. Its a really common fault, the part was dead cheap and that's how long it takes. There's even a youtube and instruction guide.
Or this which is seriously contradictory considering that you are selling it as spares or repairs because of a major oil leak and possible head gasket failure:
Yeah, I need to reword that. I guess I was saying "No known other serious faults"
This will put a lot of people off. There is nothing wrong with using Paypal Gift or Bank Transfer (particularly the latter):
I'm not using Paypal. I don't trust it. The ease with which Paypal can be used to scam myself (or some other poor schmo with a weak password, stolen paypal accounts not exactly being unheard of) its just not worth it to me.
Bank Transfer, agreed, that should be fine - but the cars at my dads, and being an old fashioned sort, he'd much prefer a bundle of notes rather than something shown to him on a phone. I'd like to say I'll be there when its sold/picked up, but there is stuff going on in my life a lot more important than getting rid of an old car. So it may be him dealing with it.
You're right, I'm antagonistic.
But I do appreciate the feedback. Thank you Acme.