A friend of mine sent me some poetry/prose that she was wandering about putting to music some way but was drawing up blanks, so I've given it a rough shot. I've really got to get a decent mic for recording, this cheapo thing is horrific. New song, Its very much in early stages I guess, a verses or two could possibly do with either ditching or turning into a bridge to give the song a bit more shape, at the moment it feels a little long and samey. The chorus I'm not so happy with its something I ad-libbed, but she likes it. Anyone got any other critiques?